the line chart shows the results of survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

the line chart shows the results of survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The line graph demonstrates the survey results that show the reasons why citizens tended to move to a specific country's capital city from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
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, the figure which had the most increase from the starting point was employment,
whereas
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; the advanture figure experienced a decline in the total of emigrated people. As the graph illustrates, the main reason that affected the increase in the number of people who moved to the capital city was because of employment which experienced just above sixty
thousand
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in 2000 until it reached approximately eighty-five
thousand
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in 2005.
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it grew slightly to just above
ninty
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ninety
thousand
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in 2010. Afterwards, it underwent a slow decrease between the five years to just under ninety
thousand
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, from 2010 to 2015.
Moreover
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, the second reason was the study. The citizens' number increased gradually from about
twinty-five
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ninety-five
thousand
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to under ninety
thousand
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during the fifteen years.
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the number of people who sought to adventure remained constant with a slight growth which could not be seen. It grew from ten
thousand
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to just above it during the fifteen years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • survey
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • reasons
  • move/migration
  • capital city
  • fluctuations
  • significant spike/drop
  • comparison
  • predict
  • highlight
  • over time
  • period
  • development
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