Some parents bring their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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and mother give their kids many
toys
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of
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make their
children
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more creative to play with them. In my
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, big number of
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for playing
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more time to
creat
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their facility to play and it
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the
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to develop motor
skill
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and cognitive
developing
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, I
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believe that having
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figure of
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will
spent much
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cost a lot of

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money to buy
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habbit
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is not good
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for

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management
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the management

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of
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economic system. There are positive impacts for
children
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wity
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with

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many
plaything
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playthings

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, the kids can improve their creativity to
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their
toy
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toys

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based on figure, size, and function.
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, plaything with
big
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size will put in
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more small
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than before will
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in the up and it is
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do until the end.
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,
plaything
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playthings

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like kind of
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construction and transportation can improve
children
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's
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about that.
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, the
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will know the name and function
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like
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has
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to clean up, dump
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to bring material, cement
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to pick up cement material, and
other
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. The lack of
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this
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habbits
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are many
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plaything
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playthings

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make
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childreen
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children

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always want to buy
knew
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toys
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. it will spend much cost to cover
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habbit
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bore
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with their
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and let
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go to
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children
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play with
the
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knew
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new

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toys
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than
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they play
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this
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plaything in few
time
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times

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after
that
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feel
get
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used to it.
For
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case, the kids will want to
knew
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know

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toys
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and money devoted will
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in
this
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habbit
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habit

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. In
conclussion
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conclusion

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, the figure of plaything
give
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many
benefit
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benefits

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for
children
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for
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developing their
skill
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and knowledge.
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, it is important thing to
be our
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attention
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financial management for family.

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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear, structured introduction and conclusion which are necessary for a high score in coherence and cohesion. Use introductory phrases and a summarizing conclusion to frame your argument effectively.
coherence cohesion
Several points are presented without clear supporting details or examples. Develop each main point with specific evidence or illustrations to enhance coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The response is somewhat relevant but often veers off-topic with overly general statements. Focus on directly answering the question and ensure all parts of the task are addressed with a balanced discussion of advantages and disadvantages.
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While some ideas are clear, others are vague or not fully comprehensible. Aim for clarity by presenting ideas in a logical order, expanding on them with clear reasoning or examples.
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There are attempts to provide examples, but many are not fully relevant or specific enough to the topic. Use more specific, targeted examples to back up your points regarding the advantages and disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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