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An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose Say what you would like to show your friend in your country

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Hi Joe, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. I'm ecstatic to know that you are planning to visit India for the summer holidays and I shall try my best to guide you with the plan for your vacations.
To begin
 with, I would suggest you visit during the month of May since the heat is bearable through early summer rather than during June or July, when the temperature soars, making it difficult to roam during
daytime
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the daytime
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. You could stay in different types of accommodation ranging from hotels to homestays,
this
 way your trip could be pocket friendly as well.
Although
, couch surfing may be an option
but
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I would suggest against that
due to
 the unsafe nature of some housing options.
Also
, do allow me to host you at my home for at least a day so I can treat you to some homemade delicacies. I would suggest exploring some tourist places like the Old Delhi area, India Gate and Red Fort. Later, we could dine in for some traditional cuisines at some of the old and famous restaurants during the evening.
However
, always be aware of your pockets and belongings because theft is common in crowded streets. Hoping to see you soon, Warm wishes, John
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is focused on a single main idea or topic for increased clarity.
task achievement
In Task Achievement, try to cover all points of the prompt in detail. For instance, when recommending the best time to visit, it's useful to also mention other times and what can be expected then.
task achievement
Provide a wider range of options and details for accommodation to fully satisfy the prompt's requirements.
task achievement
Offer more specific examples or personal anecdotes to make the letter more engaging and informative.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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