A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Karen, It's so excited to see you are going on a camping holiday for the first time

this

summer, I can definitely give you some advice

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on my past experience. There are many things to do

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the camping holiday. Things like hiking, fishing and swimming can not only sanitize your brains and alleviate pressures from working

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but

also

improve your survival abilities.

Besides

, the camping will expose you to the

magnificient

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magnificent

natural scenes, where you can experience many

unforgetable

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unforgettable

moments with your loved ones. Having said that, there are some disadvantages of

such

camping

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holiday as well,

such

as sharing bathrooms with other people at the campsite, bad weather, and dealing with bug bites and dangerous animals. Anyway, I

also

would have loved to go camping with you

this

summer, but since my cousin is visiting me from abroad

this

summer, I'll have to give up on that idea. Take care and stay fine. Warm wishes, Liren

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I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

160 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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adventure
serenity
outdoors
refreshing
hustle and bustle
inherent
foster
distractions
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unpredictable
wildlife
adequate preparation
physical demands
researching
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lasting memories
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