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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

#friend #holiday #first #time #summer #advice
Dear Karen, It's so excited to see you are going on a camping holiday for the first time
this
 summer, I can definitely give you some advice
base
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 on my past experience. There are many things to do
in
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 the camping holiday. Things like hiking, fishing and swimming can not only sanitize your brains and alleviate pressures from working
,
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 but
also
 improve your survival abilities.
Besides
, the camping will expose you to the
magnificient
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magnificent
 natural scenes, where you can experience many
unforgetable
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unforgettable
 moments with your loved ones. Having said that, there are some disadvantages of
such
camping
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 holiday as well,
such
 as sharing bathrooms with other people at the campsite, bad weather, and dealing with bug bites and dangerous animals. Anyway, I
also
 would have loved to go camping with you
this
 summer, but since my cousin is visiting me from abroad
this
 summer, I'll have to give up on that idea. Take care and stay fine. Warm wishes, Liren
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing appropriately to help the reader follow your ideas more easily.
task achievement
Cover all parts of the task in sufficient detail. Each bullet point in the prompt should be expanded into its own paragraph with clear and relevant details.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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