The pie chart below shows information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995

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The pie chart illustrates the information on the highest level of education of

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in Someland between 1945 and 1995.

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, it is clearly observed that the percentage of

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who completed their first degree and postgraduate diploma escalated by the year 1995 . And it could be clearly seen that there was a big change in all the other categories, except for the year 9 group. It is obvious that in 1945, the rate of

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who did not go to school was up to exactly 35%, which was the highest figure in the whole pie chart. An equal rate was recorded in the third-grade sort.

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, postgraduate was at the bottom of the list of seven qualifications because no females kept going to school after they had graduated. In 1995, thanks to a dramatic escalation,

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degree was the most common educated level of

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in Someland with 50%. A sharp increase was

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witnessed in the 12th and postgraduate groups.

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, the ratio of

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who completed their third grade, 6th grade or did not get to school reduced to 0%

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The pie chart below shows information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995

Increasing the price of petrol is the only way to solve environmental problems. Do you agree or disagree?

In some cities, public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own food and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, think that school is the place to learn it. Discuss both views?

Children brought up in families with less money are better prepared for life than those from wealthy families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In most countries, with the widespread of the use of Internet, people have more freedom to choose to work at home instead of travelling to work. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?