The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer
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The diagram illustrates the purpose of adults
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deciding
study
, while
the pie chart presents ways to share
adult
education cost
.
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costs
Overall
, most of
adults prefer to Change preposition
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study
because they are interested in subject
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the subject
On the other hand
, the highest way people tent
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tend
share
cost
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the cost
adult
education is by individual.
Firstly
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choose to Change preposition
of people
study
because attracted to the subject. This
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for gaining
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third place, 22% of Correct article usage
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adults
study
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for enjoying
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reasons are under 15%.
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the pie chart, the highest number of way
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share
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cost
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costs
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apply
reach
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Furthermore
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the adult
an adult
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tend
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the employer
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, the remain
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remaining
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, share, adult, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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