The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart

shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people

think the costs of adult education should be shared.

Write a report for a university lecturer
The diagram illustrates the purpose of adults
decide
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to
study
,
while
the pie chart presents ways to
share
adult
education
cost
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costs
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.
Overall
, most
of
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adults prefer to
study
because they are interested in
subject
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the subject
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.
On the other hand
, the highest way people
tent
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tend
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to
share
cost
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the cost
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of
adult
education is by individual.
Firstly
, based on the bar graph, there is 40%
people
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of people
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choose to
study
because attracted to the subject.
This
reason's proportion is close to the reasons
of gain
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for gaining
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qualification which stand at just 2%
bellow
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below
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it.
On
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the
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third place, 22% of
adult
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adults
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decide to
study
for
helpful
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in
current
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their current
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job. The reason
of
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for
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improving prospects of promotion has the same contribution
with
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as
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the reason
of enjoy
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for enjoying
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learning which hit 20%.
Moreover
,
remain
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the remaining
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reasons are under 15%.
Next,
according to
the pie chart, the highest number of
way
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ways
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to
share
study
cost
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costs
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is individually
that
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apply
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reach
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40%.
Furthermore
, 35% of
adult
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the adult
an adult
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tent
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tend
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to
share
the
cost
by
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of
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employer
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the employer
an employer
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.
Lastly
, the
remain
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25%, the smallest part, is via taxpayer.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words study, share, adult, cost with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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