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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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this
 line chart illustrates numerous
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crimes
such
 as; armed robbery , assault and murder
where
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which
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 happened in London
from
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 2003 and throughout 10 years.
Overall
, the total
number
crime
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 of A.R
were
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the
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significant
at
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 the whole span,
while
,
assault
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an assault
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 was
the
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half
comparing
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 to
previous
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the previous
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 one, the letter was
murder
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a murder
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 which
reach
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to
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the lowest
number
 in the period.
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,
majority
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the majority
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crime
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 was AR in 2004
was
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reach
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 its peak
about
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 3700, before
substantial
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 dropping was 1000 in 2008,
following
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followed
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 by
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a slightly
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slightly increased
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by
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 500
crimes
 were stable
in
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three years later.
Moreover
, assault
starting
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 by approximately 2300 and
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the
number
 of
crimes
 dropped by 500
crimes
 in 2006
thus
, fluctuant increased to
reached
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 the highest
number
was
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about 2600
crimes
 in the final period. Regarding
to
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the chart, murder was
insignificant
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the insignificant
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number
 of
crimes
 except in 2005 the total of people was killed around 1000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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