The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1990, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999
Both
of
diagrams illustrate the number of Change preposition
apply
visitors
to and from the United Kingdom thoughout
11 years and the most famous countries in Correct your spelling
throughout
UK
in 1999.
Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
, the total of visitors
that went abroad from and came to England was keep went
up during the period in question. Wrong verb form
kept going
Moreover
, the most popular country visited by UK citizens was France.
Firstly
, in 1979, people went
Correct pronoun usage
who went
oversea
from Britain was just above 10 Fix the agreement mistake
overseas
millions
and it grew Change to singular
million
up
to 20 Change preposition
apply
millions
human in roughly 1985. After that, it dramatically increased Change to singular
million
30
Change preposition
by 30
millions
Change to singular
million
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
made
it Wrong verb form
making
stood
at over 50 Wrong verb form
stand
millions
people. Change to singular
million
On the other hand
, there was
10 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
millions
Change to singular
million
foreign
visited England Correct your spelling
foreigners who
in
the beginning of 1979. It had a slight change for approximately 5 years Change the preposition
at
then
remarkably climbed untill
more than 20 Correct your spelling
to
millions
.
Change to singular
million
Lastly
, in 1999, a bit more than 10 millions
Britain people visited France which Fix the agreement mistake
million
the
highest number of Add a missing verb
has the
visitors
compared to another countries
. Not far Replace the adjective
another country
other countries
that
number, there was Spain with around 9 Change preposition
from that
millions
Change to singular
million
visitors
. The remaining data were Turkey
, Greece, and Change preposition
from Turkey
USA
with just below 5 Correct article usage
the USA
millions
Change to singular
million
visitors
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