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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1990, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1990, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999
#line #visits #uk #bar #countries #residents
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of
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diagrams illustrate the number of
visitors
 to and from the United Kingdom
thoughout
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throughout
 11 years and the most famous countries in
UK
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the UK
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 in 1999.
Overall
, the total of
visitors
 that went abroad from and came to England
was keep went
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 up during the period in question.
Moreover
, the most popular country visited by UK citizens was France.
Firstly
, in 1979, people
went
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who went
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oversea
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overseas
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 from Britain was just above 10
millions
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million
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 and it grew
up
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to 20
millions
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million
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 human in roughly 1985. After that, it dramatically increased
30
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by 30
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millions
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million
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that
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made
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making
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 it
stood
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stand
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 at over 50
millions
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million
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 people.
On the other hand
, there
was
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were
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 10
millions
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million
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foreign
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foreigners who
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 visited England
in
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at
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 the beginning of 1979. It had a slight change for approximately 5 years
then
 remarkably climbed
untill
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to
 more than 20
millions
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million
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.
Lastly
, in 1999, a bit more than 10
millions
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million
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 Britain people visited France which
the
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 highest number of
visitors
 compared to
another countries
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another country
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. Not far
that
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from that
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 number, there was Spain with around 9
millions
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million
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visitors
. The remaining data were
Turkey
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from Turkey
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, Greece, and
USA
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the USA
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 with just below 5
millions
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million
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visitors
.
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