The line graph compares the number of wildlife population per year from 2017 to 2022.
The line graph gives information about the population of three species (bears,
dolphinn
, and whales) in six years (2017-2022).
Correct your spelling
dolphins
dolphin
Overall
, the three populations have different growth patterns within six years. Bears surged drastically while
in contrast
, dolphins were extremely declining. On the other hand
, the number
of whales were fluctuating
Wrong verb form
fluctuated
along
the years.
Regarding Change preposition
over
to
bears, there were only 10 bears in the initial year. Remove the preposition
apply
Nevertheless
, the number
considerably increased, reaching slightly over 180 in 2022. While
for dolphins, it has the highest number
in the beginning but desperately plummeting until almost zero in 2022. Besides
, whales were succesfully
survive in the environment with population Correct your spelling
successfully
number
Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
fluctuated
around 80.Wrong verb form
fluctuating
Submitted by maukaburtubel on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
▼