The line graph compares the number of wildlife population per year from 2017 to 2022.

The line graph compares the number of wildlife population per year from 2017 to 2022.
The line graph gives information about the population of three species (bears,
dolphinn
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dolphins
dolphin
, and whales) in six years (2017-2022).
Overall
, the three populations have different growth patterns within six years. Bears surged drastically
while
in contrast
, dolphins were extremely declining.
On the other hand
, the
number
of whales
were fluctuating
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along
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the years. Regarding
to
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bears, there were only 10 bears in the initial year.
Nevertheless
, the
number
considerably increased, reaching slightly over 180 in 2022.
While
for dolphins, it has the highest
number
in the beginning but desperately plummeting until almost zero in 2022.
Besides
, whales were
succesfully
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successfully
survive in the environment with population
number
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fluctuated
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around 80.
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