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The diagram below show how electricity is generate in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show how electricity is generate in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates how hydroelectric
power
 would be generated by the station.
Overall
. It can be seen there are 7 stages, for
compelete
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complete
this
 operation in 2 different
mood
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moods
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 of the day.
In
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At
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the day, the
water
 went down to the high-level
reservior
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reservoir
 to be ready for
dam
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the dam
a dam
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.
Then
, by
dam
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the dam
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water
 be flowed to generate electricity which and be arrived
to
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at
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power
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the power
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 station which has 2 operations. In the next stage, the
water
be flowed
Wrong verb form
flows
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 to
low-level
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a low-level
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 reservior and
generator
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the generator
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 which
sited
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is sited
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 below
of
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apply
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the reversible turines,
be
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is
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 operated and electricity
went
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goes
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 up to
power
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the power
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 line. in the penultimate step, national green be produced by
power
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a power
the power
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 line. Eventually, at night,
this
 process which contains 7 steps, is reversed and the
water
is went
Wrong verb form
goes
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 up to the high-level
reservior
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reservoir
 by
reservible
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reservoir
 turbines.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
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