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the chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, *20.., and future projections for 2025

the chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, *20.., and future projections for 2025
#information #southland #exports #future #projections
the bar chart depicts the data of
southland's
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 export projects in three different periods
started
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starting
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 in 2000 to 2023 and a prediction
in
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 2025.
this
 information has been calibrated in
billions
.
overall
, it is clearly seen that international tourism
rose
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 over
the
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time. in
contras
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, meat products declined. first and foremost, international tourism experienced an
increasing
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 in three different years.
in addition
, in 2000
the
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export
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exports
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 gained 8
billions
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billion
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,
after
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and after
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 that
it
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kept increasing to
near
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 9
billions
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billion
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 and expecting approximately 9,9
billions
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billion
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 in 2025.
moreover
, dairy items saw a fluctuation, at the beginning the total amount of money was 6,8
billions
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billion
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. after 23 years, it
inclined
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 to 9,9
billions
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billion
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 and fell to 9,5
billions
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billion
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 respectively.
furthermore
, meat products dropped slowly at the moment. in the year
of
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2000, the total export was 6
billions
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billion
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. after that, it declined to 5,5
billions
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billion
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 and to 5
billions
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billion
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at the end
 of
period
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. to draw the conclusion, the peak moment of each
sources
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source
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 was international tourism in 2000 and 2025.
however
, 2023 reached a peak in dairy products
in
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total
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a total
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 of
near
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nearly
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 10
billions
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billion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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