The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.
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The two pie charts draw the conclusion of tourist's pros ( the
people
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, the scenery, good accommodation and culture) and cons ( weather, high cost of living, entertainment and food quality) whilst visiting Bowen
Island
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. The proportions are given in percentages.
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, most visitors reported the
people
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as the biggest advantage of travelling to Bowen
Island
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, whilst stating the largest disadvantage was the high cost of living. Boasting an impressive two-fifths, it was concluded that the
people
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was
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were
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largest
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the largest
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reason to go to the
island
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.
Similarly
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, the scenery was
also
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ranked high accounting for over one-third of the
overall
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advantages of the place. The remaining reasons to visit the
island
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were good accommodation and culture with 11% and 12% respectively.
High
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cost of living represents the most popular disadvantage representing one-half of the
people
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's results.
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, entertainment accounts for one-quarter of the cons described by tourists.
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, weather and food quality both represent 10%
each
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of each
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of the reasons not to go to the
island
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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