The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.
The given charts depict the prices of various entertainment
as well as
the attendance of each entertainment in the year 2009. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that there are five different
events
while
the attendance list
are
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only representing three segments. Looking more closely at the data, we can see that among
of
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all
events
, football games
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the most expensive prices,
whereas
the price range is started from $71 to $298. Followed by theme
parks
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parks'
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admission price
that
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costs $71 per
one
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person.
On the other hand
, there are basketball and cricket games that
costs
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respectively around $34 and 10
dollar
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cheaper for one voucher, at the same time, the cheapest ticket to get in to is the cinema and
its
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exactly $15. The other chart shows the amount of
each
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the attendance of each event
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events
attendance which was dominated by the
cinemas
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cinema's
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audience with over
than
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1000 people,
subsequently
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the theme parks
was
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attended with over
than
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200 people, and the least attended
events
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sports
that
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was statistically lower than that. To draw the conclusion, the prices that
was
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given
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a crucial role
to let
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in letting
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people decide which event to
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to
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words events with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance
  • entertainment venues
  • admission prices
  • visitors
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • revenue
  • cost-effective
  • correlation
  • trends
  • marketing strategies
  • fluctuations
  • cultural events
  • accessibility
  • demographics
  • peak season
  • off-peak
  • consumer behavior
  • pricing strategy
  • profit margin
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