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Writing Samples
Band 5

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Increasing
cost
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the cost
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 of
fuel
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 is not the best
ways
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way
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 to solve environmental problems
according to
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 my opinion. In countries like India, where the
major
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majority of
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population
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the population
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 belongs to
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middle
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the middle
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/upper
middle
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class
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, increasing
fuel
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cost
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costs
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 might affect the
countries
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country's
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 financial situation. A major population of India belongs to
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middle
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the middle
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class
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 whose major
mode
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 of
transport
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 to
work
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 is motorbike or
car
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. Increasing
fuel
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price
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prices
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 will impact working
people
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 making them compromise by either paying more for
fuel
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 or choosing a public
mode
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 of
transport
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 for travelling to
work
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.
This
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 will
further
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 impact the quality of
work
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 and living for a very large number of employees. Decreasing
quality
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the quality
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 of
work
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 will
inturn
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in turn
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 impact
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the nations
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nations
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nations'
nation's
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 financial stability. There are many other ways to tackle environmental problems in
todays
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today's
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generations
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generation
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. The world is moving towards electric vehicles.
Government
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The government
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 can encourage
people
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 to buy electric vehicles
instead
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 of
the
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apply
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vehicles that consume
non renewable
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non-renewable
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energies
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energy
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 to run. Government schemes like zero percentage road tax,
zero
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and zero
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 percentage registration fees can be made available to target
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the middle
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middle
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middle-class
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class
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 population. Vehicle taxes can be increased on luxury
cars
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 and bikes to target
upper
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the upper
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class
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 to switch from
non electric
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non-electric
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mode
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modes
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 of
transport
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 to electric
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mode
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modes
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 of
transport
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. More electric charging stations can be built so as to increase the use of electric
cars
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 in the country.
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 measures will motivate
people
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 to choose electric
cars
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/bikes
instead
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. I recently purchased a
non electric four wheeler
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non-electric four-wheeler
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. Even though I wanted to opt for an electric
car
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, I was unable to do so
due to
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high
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the high
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pricing
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price
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 of the
car
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 and insurance expenses. The
maintainance
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maintenance
 of the
car
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 was
also
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 quite expensive which eventually forced me into buying a
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fuel based
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fuel-based
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car
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. If only the electric
cars
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 in
market
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the market
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are
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were
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 listed at an affordable price, many
people
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 would
defenitely
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definitely
 move to
electric
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an electric
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mode
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 of
transport
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 without any hassle.
To conclude
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, there are alternate ways to improve current environmental problems than increasing
fuel
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 prices for
cars
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 and other modes of
transport
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.
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Task Achievement
Your essay attempts to tackle the question, but you need to develop a clear position throughout the essay. Your opinion seems to be apparent but not thoroughly justified with comprehensive supportive arguments and relevant examples.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each containing one main idea. Work on the clarity and progression of ideas from one paragraph to another and ensure the topic sentence clearly explains the main point you will discuss in that paragraph.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problem
  • increase the cost of fuel
  • cars and other vehicles
  • solve
  • to what extent do you agree or disagree
  • reasons for your answer
  • relevant examples
  • knowledge or experience
  • usage
  • alternative modes of transport
  • reduce
  • air pollution
  • carbon emissions
  • fund
  • development
  • renewable energy sources
  • disproportionately
  • low-income individuals
  • governments
  • implement
  • measures
  • mitigate
  • impact
  • vulnerable populations
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