You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter: ● Describe what you enjoyed about the course ● Say how much cooking you’ve done since the course ● Suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

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Dear Scolfit My full name is Uyg'un Parpiyev. I am studying in your cookery school. I really like

this

course. I

take

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have

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enough information about cookery and My family members

proud

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from

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me. To be honest. I feel comfortable in my kitchen,

becouse Im

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because I

every day cooking different meals.

Last

day I

had

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prepared pizza through

teached

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taught

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information

yours

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cookery school.

This

pizza

special

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is special

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for my friends.

Last

day I had

take

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offer work

bosphorus

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restourant

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restaurant

This

restourant

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restaurant

have

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got different tasty victual from

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the menu

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Furthermore

, I appreciate all of your school's organisation preparing

such

a perfect course. I'd love to stay in touch. I am waiting for your new course to attend as soon possible.

While

I await your positive feedback, I would be grateful if you could reply to my email as soon as possible. I will be waiting to hear from you. If you have any questions or thoughts, please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours

sinceerely

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sincerely

Uyg'un

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Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and that the ideas follow logically from one to the next.

Coherence & Cohesion

Include a proper greeting and sign-off to maintain a consistent structure appropriate for a letter.

Coherence & Cohesion

Use paragraphs effectively; each paragraph should focus on a single idea that relates directly to the questions asked in the task.

Task Achievement

Fully address all parts of the task, providing sufficient detail in your letter to cover each point adequately.

Task Achievement

Maintain a suitable tone throughout the letter; it should be appropriately formal or informal depending on the context of the task.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

162 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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