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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways.

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It is arguable that high achievements are the best way to estimate intellectual
abilites
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abilities
. I believe that
this
 is a wrong method of evaluating intellectual skills, because a number of individuals succeed only
due to
 luck,
whereas
 some can not get high achievements,
wether
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 they are particularly clever or not. Here is a couple of arguments to support my point of view. First of all, there are lots of successful people who got extremely lucky
aquiring
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acquiring
 wealth, without even having any intellectual abilities. There might be individuals whose parents are very rich,
therefore
 they are provided with fortune. (I have not gotten any real examples
neither
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 from my experience
nor
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or
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 from my knowledge).
Secondly
, a large number of people, though possessing high intellectual abilities, did not become successful. The main reason for
this
 is the fact that intelligence is not the key factor for success.
For instance
, if a person has a poor social status and a low
economycal
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economical
economic
 base, despite being strong-minded, is not able to achieve great success. (I have not gotten any real examples
neither
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either
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 from my experience
nor
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or
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 from my knowledge).
To sum up
, I believe that high achievements
aquired
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acquired
 by individuals are not necessarily caused by their great
mind
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minds
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, because there are many cases that deny the opposite,
although
 intelligence mostly results in success.
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It would be helpful to provide specific examples to support your points. Personal experiences, famous people or studies would strengthen your arguments.
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You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion which frame your argument well.
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