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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways.

Nowadays
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people
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 believe that
succes
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success
 is the best way to determine
intelligence
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, when other categories of
people
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 think that
intelligence
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 can be determined in other
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. My point of view is that someone can have success in life without having
a
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apply
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special
intelligence
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. High results
it
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is
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 about discipline and motivation to achieve.
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, human intellect can be measured in various
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.
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,
people
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 who have a higher
intelligence
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 will share their knowledge and opinion in academic methods
,
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 they every time will
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 differently
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 others.
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, they can demonstrate their
intelligence
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with
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ways
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 of speaking in front of enormous audiences. On the one hand, humans with a low level of knowledge and
intelligence
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they
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can not become successful.
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, personal result is an illustration of hard work and strong motivation.
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, in the first place is knowledge, with a strong motivation and special skills human can become successful in life.
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, no one can start a business and open a restaurant without knowing details about food and
humans
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human
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 preferences.
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,
person
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a person
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 with
high
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a high
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 level of
intelligence
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 can demonstrate their skills in different
ways
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.
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, if someone
have
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 been in front of
class
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the class
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 and presented a project and
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 their
idea
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idea,
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 the audience will understand
quickly their opinion
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their opinion quickly
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.
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This
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These
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 types of
person
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people
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has
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 enormous power in communication and explaining, they are very patient with annoying
people
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 and their questions.
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, everyone has
different
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a different
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 vision about determining
intelligence
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, but human intellect can be measured by good achievement and
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 in different
ways
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language
Use clear words and short sentences. Fix grammar and spelling.
structure
Have a clear plan: give your view in the intro, then 2 body parts with one idea each, then a short conclusion restating your view.
structure
Work on paragraphs. Put one idea in each paragraph and start with a topic sentence.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like and, but, also, for example to help flow.
content
Give easy examples that show your point, and explain how they prove it.
idea
There is an idea that success and mind can be seen in more than one way.
structure
Intro and conclusion exist in the essay.
content
The writer tries to show both sides of the topic.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • measure
  • intelligence
  • success
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • emotional intelligence
  • creativity
  • practical skills
  • standardized testing
  • academic performance
  • capabilities
  • potential
  • privilege
  • correlate
  • hard work
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