While travelling by metro train, your credit card slipped out of your pocket. You realized this only after reaching home. Write a letter to the concerned authorities and explain what happened.

Dear Sir , Hope you are doing fine . I am Rayan ,
resident
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a resident
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of Shanti Garden Society , Delhi. I am writing
this
letter is inform you that
i have
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I
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lost my credit
card
yesterday evening
while
traveling from Borivali
Metro
Station to
Airport
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the Airport
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. Two days ago , I came to Mumbai to attend my interview in
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the borivali
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borivali
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Borivali
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area . As
metro
train is
best
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the best
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way to travel in
metro
cities to get rid
from
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of
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traffic and
reached
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reach
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on
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one
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destination at
specified
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the specified
a specified
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time. I
have done
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did
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some shopping and kept my
card
in my pocket as
i
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I
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was in
hurry
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a hurry
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to reach
airport
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the airport
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on time to catch my flight. there was a huge rush in
metro
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the metro
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and
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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my credit
card
slipped from my pocket. Request you to if anyone
submit
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submits
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my credit
card
in your office ,
then
Please do inform me so that
i
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I
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will
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can
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arrange pick up
from
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on
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my own . kindly do needful.
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greeting and closing
The letter lacks a proper formal introduction and closing, which is expected in a formal letter. Add a formal greeting at the beginning, like 'Dear Sir or Madam' and a formal closing, such as 'Yours faithfully' or 'Yours sincerely', followed by your full name.
logical structure
Always make sure to use clear and logical sequencing of information for better coherence. Initially introduce yourself and the purpose of your letter, and then proceed with the details of the incident.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better flow. The first paragraph should introduce the purpose, the second should detail the incident, and the third should describe the requested action.
complete response
The letter partially fulfills the task as it mentions the loss of the credit card and the request for notification if found; however, it lacks specific details such as date, time and card details. This information is crucial for the authorities to help you effectively.
suitable writing tone
The tone is informal for the context of writing to an authority. Using phrases like 'Hope you are doing fine' is informal. Instead, stick to a more professional tone throughout the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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