The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts represent six electronic instruments which are mobile
phone
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phones
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,
laptop
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laptops
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,
tablet
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tablets
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, desktop
computer
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computers
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, flat-screen
TV
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TVs
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and conventional
TV
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TVs
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used by 18 to 25 aged people for watching
TV
in two different years 2009 and 2019 in Canada.
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, the proportion of conducting tools
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significantly changed in these two years.
While the
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use of conventional
TV
,
laptop
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laptops
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and desktop
computer
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computers
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are
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decreased and the other three components
are
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increased in 2019. In 2009 the
uses
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of conventional
TV
was 34%
where
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whereas
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in 2019 the
uses
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of it went down
at
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4%.
This
is the most dramatic fall here. The percentage of using
laptop
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laptops
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was 20% in 2009 and it fell to 12% in 2019.
Additionally
, in 2009 the proportion of practicing desktop
computer
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computers
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was 18% percent and it just
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dropped
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to 12% in 2019. In
the
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contrast, the proportion of using mobile
phone
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phones
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in 2009 was only 15% but in 2019 it went up to 26%. There is
also
a
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increase in
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the use of
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tablet
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tablets
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, which saw a rise from 5% in 2009 to 19% in 2019. The biggest increment was in flat-screen
TV
, which was 8% in 2009 and it jumped to 27% in 2019.
To conclude
,
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the practice
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of all six electronic tools
are
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has
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changed from 2009 to 2019. Mobile
phone
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phones
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,
tablet
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tablets
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and flat-screen
TV
were getting peak from 2009 to 2019
where
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rest
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of the instruments
got
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fall
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.
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