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The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the changes in the layout of
library
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the library
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 over the
5 years
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5-year
 period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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 there have been several developments in
structure
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the structure
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 of
library
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, with adding new genres and providing computers. One
intersting
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interesting
 fact is that
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 the figure for types of excebition which we can see right-hand and opposite side after
pass
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throw
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through
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 the entrance has been increased and
area
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the area
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 of fiction has been replaced by children's books.
Then
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have
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added
children's
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a children's
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 area between
place
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the place
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 of children's books and tables.
In contrast
,
entrance
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the entrance
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 zone
remain
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 the same
such
 as
door
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the door
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, desk and stairs. Noticeably, amount of tables has been decreased to 4 from 8 and altered to longer ones.
On the other hand
, the place for newspapers and periodicals was removed and added exhibition
corner
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 for films and DVDs. Developers who have
redesign
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 the library
also
add
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added
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 2 computers to its
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southwest
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south west
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south-west
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 side
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