73.The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

73.The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps illustrate changes in the layout of the park over the period from 1980 to today.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there have been several developments in the structure of the park, with adding some new facilities and redesigning paths which pass through the area.
To begin
, as can be seen from the map, flowers located on the right side and left side of the south gate have been removed and
added
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new objects;
for
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the former,
it
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has been replaced with a playground,
while
the latter has been altered with the brush.
Additionally
,
while
the space of the trees has been reduced, developers added new records
such
as chairs , desks and barbecue.
On the other hand
, there were 2 entrances in the south and in the west with gates to the public garden, which have been increased to 4.
Then
, the roads have been made from the south to the north and from the east to the west field.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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