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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Ahmad, Hello, hope you are in good health. I received your email that you are planning to camping holiday which I went to
last
 month. I am writing
this
 letter to share some advice that might
to
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help you.
Firstly
, you will enjoy the view of nature itself, the sun shines very brightly,
you
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and you
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 will relax right in the open air. But do not forget to take a tent with you in the evening.
This
also
 has its downsides: in the evening there are a lot of mosquitoes and flies, they are very annoying.
On the other hand
, dealing
cold
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 weather might be challenging for you
initially
, but I am confident you will adapt quickly. You know I like to be in different camps. That's why I plan to go to another camp
this
 month. I am so sorry, I can't go with you. Hope to see you soon. Yours sincerely, Samandar
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Task Achievement
To improve task response, ensure that your letter fully addresses all parts of the task. In this case, more detail could be provided on why you believe your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. Additionally, offering specific advice or tips for dealing with the disadvantages mentioned could enhance the completeness of your response.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider adding more connectors or transitional phrases to make the flow between ideas smoother. Organizing your ideas more clearly into paragraphs, each with a single, well-developed idea, can also help. While you've generally done well in greeting/closing and maintaining one idea per paragraph, ensuring that each paragraph flows naturally into the next will further improve your writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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