The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.
The chart given illustrates entertainment
venues
attendees in 2009, which Change the noun form
venue
categorized
by: sports, theme parks, and cinemas. Units measured by thousands. Generally speaking, the most popular entertainment venue was cinemas, which Add a missing verb
is categorized
is
more than 1,000,000 attendees. Verb problem
had
However
, sport
Change the noun form
sports
venues
had the least visitor
among Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
three
Correct article usage
the three
venues
at approximately 170,000 visitors. Furthermore
, theme parks are
visited by about 380,000 people in 2009.
Wrong verb form
were
Moreover
, the table presents the ticket
price
for some events that Fix the agreement mistake
prices
held
in entertainment Add a missing verb
are held
venues
. As is presented, the most expensive ticket
is for events that held
in sports Add a missing verb
are held
venue
. Football Game - AFL, Fix the agreement mistake
venues
for instance
, the ticket
price was 75 dollars
for one ticket
and 298 dollars
for family
Correct article usage
a family
consist
four members. Wrong verb form
consisting of
While
football games
Fix the agreement mistake
game tickets
ticket
was
the most expensive of them all, cinema Correct subject-verb agreement
were
ticket
Fix the agreement mistake
tickets
was
the cheapest, which Correct subject-verb agreement
were
is
only 15 Wrong verb form
was
dollars
per ticket
or you can
get Wrong verb form
could
it
55 Correct pronoun usage
apply
dollars
for four. On the other hand
, theme parks
tickets were Change the noun form
park
in
Change preposition
at
the
moderate level, which is 70 Correct article usage
a
dollars
for one and 135 dollars
for family
.
It can be concluded cinema was the most attended venue Correct article usage
a family
also
the cheapest Correct word choice
and also
ticket
in 2009.Submitted by writingielts0 on
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words venues, ticket, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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