Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued whether the circumstances of an individual
crime
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should be considered or whether there should be fixed
punishments
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for each type of
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.
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no
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can be justified with certain
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when done knowingly, I believe that there are some circumstances where
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commit
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crime
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crimes
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for their
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. On the one hand, no
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is justifiable, as if it is done intentionally, and
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is why there should be fixed
punishments
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for every
crime
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. When
someone
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commits
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crime
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a crime
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and
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other person
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another person
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, it leaves a deep impact on the victim's psychology and sometimes even they lose their life, just because of
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's cruel act. Take the murderer as an example, who took
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's life because of his
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reasons that can be money, belongings and many more. In
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case, it is imperative to place fixed
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, as it will stop happening the same with others in the future.
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,
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is a short-sighted view, as there are some
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where
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commit
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crime
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crimes
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to protect themselves.
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Self-defense
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,
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, is one of the major aspects that
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to be considered when deciding on
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punishment. Sometimes,
people
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commit
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crime
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crimes
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to defend themselves, particularly, in
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when no one is around them. In these
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, they try to fight back with all their strength, and the weapons they find in their surroundings
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as
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,
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and many more. During their defensive act, they unknowingly kill or hurt
someone
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. A particularly good example of
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is the recent incident happened in India, where women killed the rapist when she was trying to protect herself from being molested or becoming a rape victim.
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this
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reason, I believe that circumstances should be taken into account, as
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otherwise
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otherwise,
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an innocent individual has to suffer just because of his
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self-defense
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act. In conclusion, I believe that
situations
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should always be looked upon
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deciding on the punishment, as sometimes
people
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commit
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crime
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crimes
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for their
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self-defense
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. But there should be fixed
punishments
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for each
crime
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, specifically when it is intentional.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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