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living in a country where you have to speak forign language can cause serious problemls as well as practical problems. to what extend do you agree

#country #forign #language #problemls
Imigrating to
foreign
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 state with
different
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a different
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language
 will generate serious and practical problems. I
allign
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align
 with the statement since
language
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barrier
 only
lead
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 to many problems that will affect the way
imigrant
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immigrants
 live,
such
 as employment issues.
To begin
 with, many individuals come to another country mostly with a dream
for
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of
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 a better life that the former state did not provide.
For instance
, foreigners seek
job
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jobs
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 in the new states because of higher payment.
However
, most of them do not come with a lot of preparations
before hand
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beforehand
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such
 as not taking proficiency
test
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tests
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,
therefore
,
make
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 them look inadequate in the eyes of the recruiters, in turn, reducing
job
 opportunities for
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the applier
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applier
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.
Hence
, it is really important to learn the
language
 of the country that one aims
so
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for so
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this
 problem doesn't occur and limit their
career
 life.
On the other hand
, income inequality often comes from the limited
language
 the worker has. When
language
barrier
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barriers
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 limit
job
 opportunity and productivity, others with comprehensive
language
 can have more in their
career
 life
thus
 making them produce more income than the ones who are not.
In
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 example, one that speaks fluentlly
have
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easier
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an easier
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 time communicating with clients
therefore
 making them have more money coming.
Language
barrier
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barriers
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 often take a toll on
immigants
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immigants'
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career
 continuity. In conclusion,
i
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 strongly
agreed
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 that immigrants seeking
for
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apply
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better
job
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jobs
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 in other countries must have proficiency
test
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tests
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 and prepare well before moving to the host country.
Language
barrier
 impacts a lot in many
career
 progress.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic hurdles
  • Cultural nuances
  • Social integration
  • Language proficiency
  • Income disparity
  • Multilingual environment
  • Language acquisition
  • Communication breakdown
  • Social alienation
  • Resilience
  • Bilingualism
  • Intercultural dialogue
  • Language education
  • Adaptability
  • Cultural adaptation
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