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The table shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table indicates the
amount
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number
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 of people that visited Ashdown
Museum
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 a
year
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 prior to the
Museum
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's refurbishment and the
year
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 after it,
while
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 the two pie charts represent the level of satisfaction from
visitors
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as a result
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 of a survey done in the two years.
Overall
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, the table demonstrates that
total
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a total
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 number of
visitors
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to
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apply
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once the renovation was done
outweights
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outweighs
 the ones that went the previous
year
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. We can clearly see from the pie charts that those
that
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who
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 entered the
Museum
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 after it was refurbished were significantly more satisfied than the ones
that
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who
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 went before. The table shows that there is a
different
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difference
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 of almost 20.000 individuals going to the Ashton
Museum
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 after the refurbishment since 74.000 went into the building before it and 92.000
subsequently
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. The results of the surveys indicate that 40% of those 74.000
visitors
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 who went during the
year
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 before the recondition felt
dissastified
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dissatisfied
, whilst 30% reported being satisfied. Once the building went through the refurbishment, the satisfaction feeling overtook the dissatisfaction feeling since 40% out of the 92.000
visitors
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 responded that they were satisfied, with only 15% showing dissatisfaction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, year, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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