The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The maps illustrate the changes in the layouts of the
school
side
during the 20-year period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there will be several developments in the structure of the
school
area
, with adding new facilities and changing the same areas.
To begin
, looking at the maps closely sports field which was located on the north
side
of the
school
area
in 2004, will be replaced by a new
school
building,
while
the sports field will be on the east
side
of the
area
.
However
,the first car park situated in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
front of the main entrance,
while
the second car park will be added on the right
side
of the main entrance between
school
building 3 and on the right
side
of the tree.
On the other hand
, the
school
side
will be witnessed several alterations; the path will be extended to the former,
while
the road will be built in the
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
of the
area
between
school
building 2 and the park.
Submitted by orxanmikayilov44 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, side, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: