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Student learn far more with their teachers than other sources (the Internet or television). To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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During the past few decades, the means of learning are getting more and more variable. It is argued that pupils learn much more with their teachers rather than with other sources
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 as the web or the TV.
This
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 are important and each one has a crucial role in education. Learning with
a teachers
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teachers
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 can be a very unique experience, many students feel more comfortable when
setting
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sitting
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 in front of a teacher and the information
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is passed
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 much more fluently by another person
who
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whom
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 can you simply see or talk to without barriers. For
instanse
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instance
, many students feel more confident when they are able to contact directly
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the person who
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 them with the
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knowledge
,
this
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 interaction enables them to ask questions or ask for
further
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 explanation when needed and
this
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 is a huge advantage of frontal learning.
On the other hand
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, the other means of teaching can play a crucial role in education. These
ways
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 provide
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extra help for both sides, that who learns and the other who teaches. Nowadays,
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knowledge
 can be found in different untraditional
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such
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 as
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on
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 the internet or
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on
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 television,
while
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setting
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sitting
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at
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in
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the
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 chair. In fact, one can expand his or her horizons by learning new things or even
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surfing
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 the web in order to know more about one specific field that seems
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interesting
 to
hem
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him
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 or her.
To conclude
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, there are many
ways
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 to get information and it is important to strike
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 balance between the various methods in order to gain the maximal effect from these resources and improve the education procedure.
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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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