Vaccinating children against preventing diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous to waht extend do you agree or disagree?
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Vaccination
diseases
among Use synonyms
population
in the Add an article
the population
world
and it is some kind of better way to address Use synonyms
the
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apply
diseases
. Children are Use synonyms
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threatened
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because
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because of
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unkown
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.
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illnesses
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, vaccinating is necessary among Linking Words
young
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ways
specilal
infections. Correct your spelling
special
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, it can be seen Correct your spelling
Nowadays
variuos
types of infections Correct your spelling
various
which
are caused by germs Correct pronoun usage
apply
specially
viruses which cannot be prevented only by their Replace the word
especially
self immune
system.Add a hyphen
self-immune
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they must be vaccinated to enhance Linking Words
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immune to fight against dangerous viruses.Correct your spelling
their
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, inactivated poliovirus vaccine shots are given at age 2 months which has become the most successful project around the Linking Words
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saying
thay
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they
matured
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mature
taking
jabs. The vaccines are Wrong verb form
take
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the results
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result
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those
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are
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the majority
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suffer
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from
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, vaccination is not harmful for children when considering dangerous Linking Words
diseases
.
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vaccination
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