The bar chart below shows the number of visitors at three malls in somecity between 1995 and 2015
The
given
bar chart provides information about the number of people who Verb problem
apply
come
into three different malls from 1995 to 2000. Generally speaking, Wrong verb form
came
LaGuandia
, Newark, and John F. Kennedy Malls experienced an increase from the beginning to end
of the periods, with Correct article usage
the end
LaGuandia
had
the highest number and Newark with the least number.
Wrong verb form
having
LaGuandia
had the highest Correct your spelling
LaGuardia
visitors
of 35 Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
of
guests Change preposition
apply
within
Change preposition
in
the
1995 Correct article usage
apply
year
and gradually rose in the following year
. In 1996 and 1997, it was
accounted Unnecessary verb
apply
of
40 and 43 Change preposition
for
millions
respectively, Change to singular
million
whereas
, at this
point, LaGuandia
Correct your spelling
LaGuardia
being
outraced by John F. Kennedy Malls in terms of the highest Wrong verb form
was
guests
. After that, it made up approximately 3 Correct quantifier usage
number of guests
millions
to 46 Change to singular
million
millions
in 1998 and reached its peak Change to singular
million
at the end
of the periods
in 2000 with 68 Fix the agreement mistake
period
millions
Change to singular
million
visitors
. As well as
LaGuandia
, Newark Mall also
faced an upward trend throughout the intervals. It started with 15 millions
which became the lowest among the Change to singular
million
other
. The Fix the agreement mistake
others
visitors
inclined
Verb problem
increased
overtime
until 1997 it reached 40 Correct your spelling
over time
millions
people and remained stable for the rest of the Change to singular
million
year
.
However
, John F. Kennedy Mall faced a fluctuate
throughout the periods. It began with 27 Replace the word
fluctuation
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
of
people and steadily rose Change preposition
apply
up
to 48 million in 1997. The next Change preposition
apply
year
, it declined a little to 38 millions
and remained stable the following Change to singular
million
year
. Finally
, it was
increased again Unnecessary verb
apply
up
to 44 Change preposition
apply
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
of
Change preposition
apply
visitors
in 2000.Submitted by writingielts0 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words laguandia, visitors, millions, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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