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The bar chart below shows the number of visitors at three malls in somecity between 1995 and 2015

The bar chart below shows the number of visitors at three malls in somecity between 1995 and 2015
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bar chart provides information about the number of people who
come
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 into three different malls from 1995 to 2000. Generally speaking,
LaGuandia
, Newark, and John F. Kennedy Malls experienced an increase from the beginning to
end
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 of the periods, with
LaGuandia
had
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 the highest number and Newark with the least number.
LaGuandia
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LaGuardia
 had the highest
visitors
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 of 35
millions
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of
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guests
within
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the
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1995
year
 and gradually rose in the following
year
. In 1996 and 1997, it
was
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accounted
of
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 40 and 43
millions
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million
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 respectively,
whereas
, at
this
 point,
LaGuandia
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LaGuardia
being
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was
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 outraced by John F. Kennedy Malls in terms of the highest
guests
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. After that, it made up approximately 3
millions
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 to 46
millions
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million
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 in 1998 and reached its peak
at the end
 of the
periods
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 in 2000 with 68
millions
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million
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visitors
.
As well as
LaGuandia
, Newark Mall
also
 faced an upward trend throughout the intervals. It started with 15
millions
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million
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 which became the lowest among the
other
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others
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. The
visitors
inclined
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overtime
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 until 1997 it reached 40
millions
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 people and remained stable for the rest of the
year
.
However
, John F. Kennedy Mall faced a
fluctuate
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 throughout the periods. It began with 27
millions
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million
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of
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people and steadily rose
up
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to 48 million in 1997. The next
year
, it declined a little to 38
millions
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million
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 and remained stable the following
year
.
Finally
, it
was
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increased again
up
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to 44
millions
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million
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of
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visitors
 in 2000.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words laguandia, visitors, millions, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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