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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planne of future development of the site

the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planne of future development of the site
#show #area #town #norbition #planne #future #development #site
the maps give us information about an industrial place in Norbtion
also
 it provides the new
plane
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plan
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 for
developing
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development
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 in
teh
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the
 future.
overall
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 it can be seen that the
noteciable
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noticeable
change will in the replacement of housing which
add
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adds
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 a
quite
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quiet
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 house
instead
 of
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a
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factory . regards to
first
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the first
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map
 which
it
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apply
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has roundish at the
center
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centre
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 of
map
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the map
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aslo
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also
,
at
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on
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 the east side there are
anumber
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a number
 of
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the factory
a factory
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factory
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factories
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at the top and bottom of
road
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the road
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 .
futhermore
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Furthermore
from
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the
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north of
plane
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the plane
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,
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there is
a
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apply
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farmland . regards to
second
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the second
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map
 . a big change will be in the
buliding
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building
 of houses
instead
 of factors so
this
 place will be
a
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apply
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residential rather than industrial. on the one hand at the top of
map
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the map
a map
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 they are going to
constract
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contract
construct
some houses which is one of the
change
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changes
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,
on the other hand
 ,they add
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a playgraound
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playgraound
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playground
 to
north
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the north
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 side between houses
also
at the end
 of the road will be
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the
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school .
additionally
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additionally,
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 at the west of
plan
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the plan
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,
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they might add shops with a short road from north to west
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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