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The chart below show how frequently people in US ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 2013

The chart below show how frequently people in US ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 2013
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
people
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 eating fast food in the USA restaurants in three years 2003, 2006, and 2013. After Analysis, it can be seen clearly that, first of all, the portion of
people
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 who were eating fast food every day or never eating was smaller than 5%.
while
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 other
people
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 ate once a week and once or two a month was around 20% in 2003 and 2013 but in 2006 was lower by 10%.
furthermore
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, the percentage of citizens who eat food several times a week and a few times a year was around 15% in 2003 and 2013
although
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 in 2006 was increased to 10%.
On the other hand
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, As a whole the small chart belongs to the
people
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 who were eating never or every day.
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 the large segment of the chart includes the citizens who eat once a week and once or twice a month.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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