You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefe
Dear Sir,
I am Simi and I am living in the accommodation
that is
provided by the college. I am writing this
letter in regard to expressing my dissatisfaction with the arrangement of my room
as I am sharing my room
with another student and i
find it very difficult for me to stay there.
The main issue is that my roommate Saloni is working at an outlet .She always has a late night shift and she makes very much noise before going to bed Change the capitalization
I
as well
as
she Correct word choice
apply
always
Rephrase
also always
play
music at Correct subject-verb agreement
plays
very
high volume which Correct article usage
a very
disturb
me a lot Change the verb form
disturbs
while
studying. Besides
this
, I am a very hygienic person as well
as
I have some OCD in regard to cleanliness Correct word choice
and
and
she makes a mess all the time in our Correct word choice
apply
room
which makes it difficult for me to live there.
I hope you understand my situation and I am requesting you to change my room
. My preference is a single room
accommodation for myself due to
my OCD and I want to live alone.
I am really looking forward to hearing from you soon and Thanks for your cooperation.
Yours faithfully,
Simi.Submitted by sirat
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear and distinct idea related to the overall topic. Your letter should have separate paragraphs for describing the situation, explaining your problems, and stating your preferred accommodation.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout your letter and avoid informal language. Additionally, ensure that your letter includes a formal salutation and closing.
task achievement
Develop your ideas fully to respond comprehensively to the task. Include specific details and reasons for your problems and clearly express what kind of accommodation you would prefer and why.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite