The pie chart show the main reasons of money spent on various facilites in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart show the main reasons of money spent on various facilites in 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 Write at least 150 words.
The pie chart shows the
government
expenditure on various facilities in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, compared to 2010 and 2015, all sectors remain similar portion, not changing significantly. Specifically,
although
the education field decreased by 3 per
cent
, it accounted for first place in these periods.
However
, in 2015, the gap between education and healthcare
is
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only 1 per
cent
- 21 per
cent
and 20 per
cent
respectively.
On the other hand
, pensions remain the same without any change.
Although
the percentage of
government
expenditure on interest on borrowing and transport still remains the lowest portion, their percentage notably increased compared to the past. Specifically, interest on borrowing has doubled and the welfare field exceeds 10 per
cent
.
However
, the facilities regarding defence decreased its budget from 17 per
cent
to 14 per
cent
.
To sum up
,
this
chart shows how the
government
put into their budget
on
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the various sectors
as well as
the tendency about the
government
's priority.
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