The pie chart show the main reasons of money spent on various facilites in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

#show #money #facilites #information #features #comparisons

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The pie chart shows the

government

Use synonyms

expenditure on various facilities in 2010 and 2015.

Overall

Linking Words

, compared to 2010 and 2015, all sectors remain similar portion, not changing significantly. Specifically,

although

Linking Words

the education field decreased by 3 per

cent

Use synonyms

, it accounted for first place in these periods.

However

Linking Words

, in 2015, the gap between education and healthcare

Wrong verb form

was

show examples

only 1 per

cent

Use synonyms

- 21 per

cent

Use synonyms

and 20 per

cent

Use synonyms

respectively.

On the other hand

Linking Words

, pensions remain the same without any change.

Although

Linking Words

the percentage of

government

Use synonyms

expenditure on interest on borrowing and transport still remains the lowest portion, their percentage notably increased compared to the past. Specifically, interest on borrowing has doubled and the welfare field exceeds 10 per

cent

Use synonyms

However

Linking Words

, the facilities regarding defence decreased its budget from 17 per

cent

Use synonyms

to 14 per

cent

Use synonyms

To sum up

Linking Words

this

Linking Words

chart shows how the

government

Use synonyms

put into their budget

Change preposition

apply

show examples

the various sectors

as well as

Linking Words

the tendency about the

government

Use synonyms

's priority.

Submitted by blingyr on Fri Dec 29 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

▼

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, however".

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words government, cent with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.

▼

7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers; Some others believe that less control will help children deal with their adult life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
While some people are of the opinion that children should obey their parents and teachers, others believe that would be useful giving their freedom by not taking so much control which will allow them to learn in solving their life problems. In my point of view, I am more inclined to believe that children are still in the stage that need olders assistance and directions but too strict rules may have and adverse influence on the problem solving abilities to children. This essay will break down the differences between these two point of view.
6
band
some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that his money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?
It is said that some believe the government should spend their money elsewhere rather than on the arts, because it is a waste of money. I strongly disagree with this opinion due to its financial benefits.
6.5
band
The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
Science has the potential to significantly enhance various aspects of human life, though it can also lead to considerable harm. I fully agree that the primary aim of scientific endeavors should be to improve our quality of life, particularly in areas such as healthcare, transportation, and communication. Conversely, we must refrain from using science to develop harmful technologies, such as new weapons.
7.5
band
The top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
One school of thought holds that companies should prioritize generating profits, and they are not required to have social duties. While I accept that perception is somewhat justified, I believe that there are other factors that companies need to contribute to their societies.
8
band
Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1. Apologize for damaging the product 2. Explain what happened 3. Say how are you going to fix the issue
I hope you’re doing great. I’d like to thank you for borrowing me your camera and it did help me a lot during my trip to Japan. But I’ve got to tell you that I accidentally broke the lens. I feel terribly sorry for that and I hope you can forgive me.

The pie chart show the main reasons of money spent on various facilites in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers; Some others believe that less control will help children deal with their adult life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that his money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

The top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1. Apologize for damaging the product 2. Explain what happened 3. Say how are you going to fix the issue