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The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county.

The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county.
The bar chart illustrates the Population in the 3 counties of the state of Oregon
such
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 as
Columbia
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,Yamhill,and Washington throughout the given period from 1940 to 2000. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
number
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 of people who live in these countries witnessed an upward trend
while
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 Washington had the highest
number
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 in comparison to others. From the chart it can be seen that the
number
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 of citizens in Washington in 1940 was almost 75
whereas
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this
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number
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 rose significantly to about 120 in 1970
then
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 it rocketed to around 245 in 2000.
On the other hand
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, individual numbers in
Columbia
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 and Yamhill just started nearly at the same amount which was about 30 during 30 years Yamhill had more changes in amount rather than
Columbia
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 which was 45 and 20 respectively.Meanwhile, both countries had a marginal increase by 2000.
Columbia
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 got just over 60 and Yamihill got to just under 90.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words columbia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • Population
  • state of Oregon
  • county
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • patterns
  • population growth
  • populous
  • population decline
  • steady population growth
  • less populous
  • summarize
  • prediction
  • suggestion
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