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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using CCTV cameras to fight crime?

#cctv #cameras #fight #crime
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In
todays
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 digital world,
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the use
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 of
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cameras
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 to tackle intruders is a common practice. There are numerous pros and cons to
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, I believe its benefits surpass in various aspects. In
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both advantages and disadvantages.
CCTV
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cameras
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 are widely used to keep crime at bay. Potential criminals refrain
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from performing theft and vandalism knowing their act might be recorded.
CCTV
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 footage is used as
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solid evidence that helps convict criminals. Having
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cameras
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 in places
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 and nurseries provides a sense of security to parents. They
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 provide round-the-clock monitoring in areas where constant human presence is practically impossible.
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, there was a theft that was recorded in a car at a parking lot in the city mall
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 month and without proper
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 footage the burglar would have escaped and performed more thefts in the city.
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, a good quality
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 camera is quite expensive. One needs to invest in its storage
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maintenance
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 footage leaks.
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 issue can be solved by opting for
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cameras
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 that have security
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 which can be restricted from everyones
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access
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Eventhough
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cameras
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 have
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 disadvantages, they enhance security in
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society,making it a safe and secure place to live without any fear. The presence of
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cameras
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 has helped women move around the city without any concern.
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coherence cohesion
The essay provided a clear introduction and conclusion, but they could be further developed to present a more compelling argument and summary of the points discussed. The logical structure of the essay was adequate, yet it would benefit from clearer transitions between ideas and a more systematic development of points.
task achievement
You adequately addressed the task, providing both advantages and disadvantages of CCTV in fighting crime. To improve, ensure that your response fully elaborates on each point with detailed explanations and a balanced discussion. Refrain from introducing new ideas in the conclusion and focus on summarizing the key points made throughout the essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrent
  • CCTV (Closed-Circuit Television)
  • Evidence
  • Constant surveillance
  • Monitor
  • Privacy
  • Vandalism
  • Malfunction
  • Blackmail
  • Voyeurism
  • Surveillance
  • Maintenance
  • Conviction
  • Authorities
  • Public safety
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