The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
table demonstrates economic and social indicators for four countries Canada
, Japan
, Peru
, Zaire
. Correct word choice
and Zaire
According to
United Nations statistics. The Annual income per person in Japan
1570
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is 1570
dollar
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dollars
that is
the highest income compering
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compared
on the other
hand
the lowest Add the comma(s)
hand,
country
income is Change noun form
country's
Zaire
130 USD for each person that significant difference.
Canada
lesser
than Correct word choice
is less
Japan
11100
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by 11100
dollar
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dollars
Peru
is up than Correct word choice
and Peru
Zaire
by 30 recording 160.
The life expectancy at birth in Canada
is the second highest 76 in addition
it is lower than Japan
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in Japan
that
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apply
reflects
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reflecting
influence
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the influence
wages
, Change preposition
of wages
Zaire
is the lowest and Peru
is higher than Zaire
.
Canada
recorded the uttermost number in the daily calorie supply per person 3326, Which lower than Canada
is Japan
2846, The second lowest Peru
, Zaire
the lowest country.
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and Zaire
Canada
and Japan
recorded the same percentage in adult literacy rate 99 per cent, Peru
68 per cent , Zaire
34 per cent.Correct word choice
and Zaire
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