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The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now.

The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now.
#maps #university #sports #courts
he
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The
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 map illustrates a sports
center
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centre
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 in
university
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a university
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 from 1990 to the present day.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the map
had
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 undergone several changes including the
adding
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 of new
amenties
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amenities
 and the replacement of
specififc
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specific
 areas
such
 as the basketball
court
.
Additionally
, a new line has been drawn separating the
court
 and the other facilities today. Regarding the western area of the map, the park has been eradicated in order to make room for new basketball courts. As for the car park, the area has been replaced with a tennis
court
, with the building of two more courts available. As for the remaining area, the coffee shop, which is adjacent to the outdoor pool, remained
unchange
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unchanged
 in the location till today,
while
 the pool has changed from using indoor to outdoor activities. / Evidently, a new fitness
center
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 has been built in the location of the old tennis
court
, with it being close to a changing room that has just moved from the coffee shop
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