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In order to solve traffic problems, Vietnamese government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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It is quite common these days for the Vietnamese government should tax private
car
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owners
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 heavily and use the
money
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 to improve public
transportation
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 to solve
traffic
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 problems.
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 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
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 trend. On the one hand, there are several reasons why taxing private
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owners
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 heavily
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 beneficial. A common reason is that if more and more individuals own cars in Vietnam, it will become a huge problem in road
traffic
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 because our country’s
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 are very small and cannot accommodate too many large vehicles. Explanations, the
roads
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 in Ho Chi Minh City are often jammed with
traffic
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, partly
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 the population, the rest is
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 too much large vehicle
traffic
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, so the city has banned large trucks from circulating from 5am to 10pm every day. Another cause is the circulation of many large vehicles will cause damage to the
roads
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.
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, recently, many city
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 had to be redone
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 severe damage, with many deep holes that made
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 impossible.
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, there are a number of disadvantages of taxing private
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owners
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 heavily and using the
money
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 to improve public
transportation
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 that people should take into consideration. One obvious drawback is that high taxes will lead to buying a
car
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 costing a lot of
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 and work time. Explanations an individual who wants to own it will have to work harder and it can be said that with the average salary in Vietnam, they will work for a long time to get it. You can own your desired
car
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. Another negative effect is that high taxes to improve public
transportation
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 will negatively impact labour capacity and demand.
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, they feel that buying a
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 is unnecessary because there are public services, leading to a decrease in labour productivity and the country’s
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average income will decrease. In conclusion, the Vietnamese government should tax private
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owners
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 heavily and use the
money
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 to improve public
transportation
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 could bring about certain benefits, but its negative consequences should not be overlooked.

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supported main points
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clear comprehensive ideas
relevant specific examples
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Your opinion

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