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The images below explain the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

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The picture indicates the main cycle of pollutants from contemporary life becoming acid rain which pollutes the environment and the food chain afterwards.
Overall
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, there are four sources of pollution.
First,
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the pollutants are produced by extensive functioning transport, factories, power stations and housing, after they rise to clouds.
Secondly
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, polluted clouds cross countries and continents.
Subsequently
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, acid rain falls and damages the environment, including hills and fields, trees and plants, rivers, and lakes. Toxic clouds encompass carbon dioxide, sulfur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, mercury and other compounds.After the ecosystems are contaminated, hazardous substances enter the nutritional sequence
by
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through
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 soil and spoiled water,
that
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which
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 are consumed by some animals and insects
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coherence cohesion
You have a clear overall structure to your essay, effectively summarizing the process of how pollutants lead to acid rain and its consequences. To enhance your coherence, consider using a wider range of linking words to smoothly connect your ideas.
task achievement
Try to delve deeper into describing each stage of the process in more detail. While you've outlined the key aspects, more specificity could provide a clearer understanding of the process and its impacts.
task achievement
The essay effectively outlines the cycle of pollutants transitioning into acid rain and its impact on the environment and food chain, covering all essential stages of the process.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow from one step to the next makes the process easy to understand, showcasing a good level of coherence and cohesion.

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