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The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.
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These three maps illustrate how the hospital area of Queen Mary
had
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 changed, every 20 years, for over 40 years.
Overall
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, the hospital remained in the same position
along
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 the period,
while
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 all of the features around it developed into
healthy
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a healthy
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center
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centre
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. Compared from 1960 to 1980,
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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, which was located
at
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to
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 the west of
hospital
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the hospital
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, was replaced by
cancer
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a cancer
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center
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centre
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 and pharmacy.
In addition
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, the pharmacy became
into
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one building with the hospital which
stay
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at
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 the east.
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, the farmland
bellow
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below
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 the shopping
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center
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centre
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 was changed into a place where
nurse
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nurses
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to
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apply
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study.
At
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In
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 the
last
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of
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apply
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period time, in 2000, there was an expansion of
cancer
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the cancer
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center
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 and it was built like
letter
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a letter
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of
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apply
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L that
still
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is still
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in
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on
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 the left side.
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,
parking
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the parking
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 area, which remained at
bellow
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the bellow
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 of the hospital, reduced its area. It was
also
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happend
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happened
 to
nursing
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the nursing
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 school that reduced and relocated next to the car park.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial structure
  • renovations
  • expansions
  • hospital complex
  • infrastructure
  • layout
  • capacity
  • technological advances
  • environmental footprint
  • sustainability practices
  • pedestrian pathways
  • parking facilities
  • medical wards
  • specialist units
  • outpatient services
  • landscaping
  • public transport links
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