The charts below show the percentage of students joining North West University.

The charts below show the percentage of students joining North West University.
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The two pie charts illustrate the rate of undergraduates who
selected
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to
North West
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North-West
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University's seven faculties and how many non-US learners are in the
art
faculty.
Overall
,
art
was the most significant faculty at North West University
while
medicine made up the smallest part of the chart.
In addition
to that, out of all
art
students South Americans are the biggest group and Africans are the smallest group in the academy. It is clear, that the
art
students made up 23% as the large proportion
while
computing and science are taking second and third places respectively. It has a mere 1% difference between these 3 faculties. Medicine is the faculty which belongs
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lowest amount of learners and it is 5%.
Moreover
, 14% of
puils
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pupils
join the business department
while
9% of undergraduates are studying engineering. The largest group of scholars are from South America as 79% select
art
as their higher studies.
Additionally
, Europeans are 21% in
this
same department and Asians and Australians are 6% and 4% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words art with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment
  • demographics
  • percentages
  • academic year
  • trends
  • gender distribution
  • faculties
  • departments
  • domestic
  • international
  • academic disciplines
  • economic conditions
  • scholarship
  • reputation
  • growth
  • parity
  • data analysis
  • popularity
  • external factors
  • predictive modeling
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