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increasing the price of petrol is the best way to reduce growing traffic and pollution. To extent do you agree or disagree.

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
Compared to
few
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 decades ago,
traffic
 and pollution are
the
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serious issues throughout the world. To
certain
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 extent, I agree that augmenting the cost of
fuel
 will help to mitigate it.
However
, there are
also
 alternative measures that can be taken. To
initiate
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 with, excessive use of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 is the prime reason for increasing
traffic
 and pollution. Inclining the price of
fuel
 will help to decline
use
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the use
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or
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of
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 two and
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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 and
subsequently
 improve the environment.
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middle class
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 people, which
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 a majority of
population
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the population
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 in
nation
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nations
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such
 as India will not be afford the cost of
fuel
.
Consequently
, they will start using buses and trains.
This
 will not only reduce the congestion of vehicles on
road
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the road
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 but
also
 drop the emission of harmful gases
in
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environment
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the environment
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.
one
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 clear example is there was a significant drop
of
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in
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traffic
 in Ahmedabad when the price of
fuel
 hacked by almost ten
percent
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.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 some other ways that can prove to be more effective.
Government
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The government
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 should take some innovative steps like
,
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odd-even
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the odd-even
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 rule. To elaborate, odd and even number cars can run only on the alternative days and
therefore
, the use of cars will fall by 50%.One clear example is
,
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that, Delhi
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Delhi
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the Delhi
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 government implemented
this
 rule
last
 month and
12
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a 12
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-15%
of
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reduction
of
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in
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 pollution was observed. Another effective way worth mentioning is to improve the quality
as well as
 frequency of public transport, If government execute
this
,
then
 people will avoid using private vehicles.
To sum up
, from the points mentioned above,
although
, a bike in cost of
fuel
 will reduce
traffic
. I personally believe that alternative methods like, improvement in public transport
facility
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facilities
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 would be more beneficial.
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  • discourage
  • incentivize
  • environmentally friendly
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable economy
  • disproportionately affect
  • daily commuting
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • comprehensive solutions
  • public transportation systems
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