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The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
#amount #waste #three #companies #period #years
The line graph
despicts
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depicts
 about the number of
trash
 produced by three different companies from the year
of
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2000 until 2015. It can be concluded that
,
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company
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the company
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a
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an
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 experienced
down trend
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downtrend
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.
Meanwhile
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 other companies got the opposite result. In the beginning,
company
 a was the highest of
waste
 produced in 2000 and in 2015
company
 c
were
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 the number 1 of
trash
 produced. Looking in more detail,
company
 c starting in the lowest level of composed, around 4
tonners
 in 2000. It increased significantly to a level of 10
tonners
 surpassing
by
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company
 a and b. They reached a peak in 2015. Meanwhile,
company
 B hit
different
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a different
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 trend. They made 8
tonners
 of
waste
 in 2000, after that it grew slowly to 10
tonners
 of
waste
 in 2005.
On the contrary
, they decreased sharply in 2015 and hit the bottom point from 10
tonners
 to 3
tonners
 of
trash
 produced.
Company
 a were the top of the
waste
 produced in 2000.
However
, it underwent
decline
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a decline
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during
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for
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 15 years, from 12
tonners
 in the year
of
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2000
until
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to
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 8
tonners
 in 2015. They were
being
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a
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the
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 second highest of the
trash
 composed.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trash, company, waste, tonners with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste production
  • company
  • trends
  • significant
  • fluctuations
  • surges
  • reductions
  • correlations
  • environmental policies
  • technological advancements
  • units of measurement
  • time period
  • stability
  • milestones
  • graph analysis
  • pattern recognition
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