๐๐ค๐ข๐ ๐ฅ๐๐ค๐ฅ๐ก๐ ๐ฉ๐๐๐ฃ๐ ๐ฉ๐๐๐ฉ ๐๐ฉ ๐๐จ ๐๐๐ฉ๐ฉ๐๐ง ๐๐ค๐ง ๐ค๐ก๐๐๐ง ๐จ๐๐๐ค๐ค๐ก๐๐๐๐ก๐๐ง๐๐ฃ ๐ฉ๐ค ๐จ๐ฉ๐ช๐๐ฎ ๐ ๐ก๐๐ง๐๐ ๐ฃ๐ช๐ข๐๐๐ง ๐ค๐ ๐จ๐ช๐๐๐๐๐ฉ๐จ ๐๐ฃ๐ ๐๐๐ซ๐๐ก๐ค๐ฅ ๐ ๐ง๐๐ฃ๐๐ ๐ค๐ ๐ ๐ฃ๐ค๐ฌ๐ก๐๐๐๐. ๐๐ฉ๐๐๐ง๐จ ๐๐ง๐๐ช๐ ๐ฉ๐๐๐ฉ ๐ฉ๐๐๐ฎ ๐จ๐๐ค๐ช๐ก๐ ๐จ๐ฉ๐ช๐๐ฎ ๐ ๐จ๐ข๐๐ก๐ก๐๐ง ๐ฃ๐ช๐ข๐๐๐ง ๐ค๐ ๐จ๐ช๐๐๐๐๐ฉ๐จ ๐๐ฃ๐ ๐๐ค๐๐ช๐จ ๐ค๐ฃ ๐๐๐ฉ๐๐๐ก๐จ. ๐ฟ๐๐จ๐๐ช๐จ๐จ ๐๐ค๐ฉ๐ ๐ซ๐๐๐ฌ๐จ ๐๐ฃ๐ ๐๐๐ซ๐ ๐ฎ๐ค๐ช๐ง ๐ค๐ฅ๐๐ฃ๐๐ค๐ฃ.
Some individuals claim that a better way for older schoolchildren to
study
a large number of subjects
and improve a wide range of knowledge. However
, others argue that they should study
a smaller number of subjects
and concentrate on details. In my view, I am in favour of the latter notion.
There is a compelling argument to be made for providing students
with a broad-based education. One primary advantage of this
approach is that students
can discern their innate talents and passions. This
can be seen in the case of Vietnam, a rapidly developing nation, which requires multifaceted professionals in various fields. This
method, however
, is not without drawbacks. A huge number of study
plans can leave students
overwhelmed, leading to superficial knowledge,as teachers might race to cover the syllabus rather than ensure true comprehension. In a class in Hanoi, for instance
, where students
juggled between ten subjects
, it was observed that genuine interest was often substituted with rote learning to merely pass examinations.
However
, I believe that students
should focus on a select few subjects
to delve into in-depth knowledge. a
deeper understanding of Capitalize word
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subjects
can nurture critical thinkers and problem solvers, invaluable assets in today's complex world. For instance
, students
in Da Nang who took an intensive course in environmental sciences were better poised to propose sustainable solutions to the city's pollution problems than their broadly educated counterparts. As a result
, they will contribute to be
useful members of society and they will earn a lot of money in the coming years.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
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while
it is irrefutable that students
can study
a wide range of subjects
to kindle undiscovered passions and talents. I am more inclined to endorse a focused educational approach.
It not only gears up students
for specialized roles in society but also
fosters in-depth understanding and analytical thinking,Submitted by pnkhanhlove on
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