Some students take a year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to work or to travel. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
There has been considerable debate
to
whether a gap year is beneficial to students who may choose to find a job or go on an excursion Change preposition
as to
instead
of further
accomplishing within
their specialities. Which could be detrimental to how they succeed within their Change preposition
apply
field
. In this
essay
I will discuss both the Add a comma
essay,
merit
and Fix the agreement mistake
merits
demerit
of Fix the agreement mistake
demerits
this
notion and shed a
light on the preference for the Correct article usage
apply
later
.
Correct your spelling
latter
Firstly
, taking breaks
after education may be favourable to individuals
mental health as it allows them to reset and essentially take a break. Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
This
will allow them to become refreshed, permitting them to put all their focus onto
the favoured subject in which they had studied. They could obtain a lot more experience in their Change preposition
on
field
, doing internships or work placements as well as
saving money, to start up their own business within their field
. Moreover
, this
means that when taking this
recess, the personage will become more efficient, appreciating one's achievements and is able to exceed more than their qualification alone.
On the other hand
, on a complete
different stance Change the adjective
completely
by
Change preposition
of
altruism's
, taking long pauses in education, going travelling or working in a different Change noun form
altruism
field
, may create distance to the individual's accomplishments. It may perhaps be a detrimental decision for the students
careers, leading them to possibly Change to a genitive case
student's
students'
forgetting
their specifications and knowledge. Wrong verb form
forget
This
implies that the years they studied has
inevitably gone to waste as they no longer want to pursue it. Correct subject-verb agreement
have
For
instance
when taking Add a comma
instance,
breaks
, individuals may develop imposter syndrome due to
new information and experiences, making them want to do something completely different.
Overall
, exploring both aspects, I strongly opine that although
breaks
can be advantageous, long breaks
,
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causes
more complications Correct subject-verb agreement
cause
that
merits. Correct word choice
than
This
has concured
me to reiterate that gap years are not beneficial for students who want to pursue a career in their chosen specialty.Correct your spelling
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