Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some citizens believe Advertising
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affect
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people
and
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them to buy things
while
others say
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way
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answer and we no longer pay attention to it because of common.
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advisitor
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a visitor
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want
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to advert some
people
, probably they forget to be honest and care about money more
while
some
people
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this
advertising because they
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aren't
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variety
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the variety
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of new
products
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subject will be explored.
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of
population
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the population
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can be changed by some
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beautiful
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, some
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advisor
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advisors
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probabely
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probably
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be
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honest about what they want to say, and
this
can have
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effect on the citizen's
mind
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minds
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, leading
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them to
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choose their way without advertising.
For example
, some
shopper
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shoppers
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would rather
compelling person
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be compelled
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even
they
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if they
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induce
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are induced
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to tell not the truth when have useless T-shirts and can's sell them to
people
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Although
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honest is undeniable, whether advertising
needed
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is needed
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is
debateable
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debatable
.
Thus
,
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agree with
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success
of advertising
at
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the persuading population. Meanwhile, lots of
people
extremely need
to
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apply
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advertising because
this
can help them to make
a
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the
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right decision owing to
unaware
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being unaware
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from
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buying new
products
.
Moreover
, every
goods
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has
special
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a special
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way of
use
, that all of
citizens
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the citizens
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should be considered.
Therefore
, they need to be
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familiar
about
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with
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these
routs
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routes
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to
use
correctly
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them correctly
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.
For instance
, the first time when
people
buy a computer, they can't
use
of
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this
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these
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products
accurately, so with the right advertising about buying and using these things, they can prevent
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them.
To sum up
,
i
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agree with
success
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the success
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of advertising because some
people
definitelly
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definitely
need it when they want to
use
or buy different
products
.
However
,
seller
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sellers
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have to
be considered
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consider
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the
right
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rights
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of customers and be honest to
grapping
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grab
attention
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the attention
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of
people
.
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Introduction/Conclusion Present
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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