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The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.
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The line graph illustrates the comparison of Gross Domestic Product in
Bangaladesh
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Bangladesh
, Pakistan, Nepal and Malaysia. Units measured by billions of US dollars.
Overall
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an
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initialy
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initially
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 Malaysia experienced an upward trend but, after 4 years it started to fall.
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, it's remained as the highest producer throughout the given time period.
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 to that, both Pakistan and
Bangaladesh
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Bangladesh
were
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experienced an upward trend
while
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 Nepal remained constant during
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this
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 five years. In 2010, Malaysia earned the highest amount of money and it was about 250
billions
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of
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US dollars. After, the next year it showed
sharp
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rose
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 to 300 and
then
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 gradually increased
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 money until 2014 at about 350. In the following
year
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 the figure started to drop to approximately 300 but, maintained the major Gross Domestic Producer out of all countries. Nepal performed constant economic performances from
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beginning to end. It was around 25. In 2010,
Pakistan
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 GPD was about 175 and it
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 up in the next year to about 210. The figure performed an upward trend and hit the highest
to
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 around 275.
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 the
beginning
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Bangaladesh
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Bangladesh
 contributed to the economy by earning around 125 and showed steady growth and reached its peak of about 200
billions
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of
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US dollars in 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
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