The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below
The bar graph depicts
percentage
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the percentage
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of free-time
activites
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activities
which
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in which
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the
particiants
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participants
are
boys
and
girls
by 5 to
14 year olds
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14-year-olds
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in Australia. There are 5 different activities to do when they have a spare time.
Overall
, the most popular event is either watching television or videos for both
girls
and
boys
,
while
the unpopular events are
skatebording
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skateboarding
for children and art or craft for
boys
. Looking in more detail, A lot of children
watching
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watch
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TV/ videos as a hobby. It is up to approximately one hundred
percent
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per cent
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of them like to watch.
The
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My
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second favorite leisure activity is playing electronic or computer games. Around 80% of man-child love to play computer games,
whereas
the
girls
get the opposite, at 60%. It is almost similar
with ride
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to riding
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a bike,
boys
get around 75% and
girls
only
sixty
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60
percent. Meanwhile, playing
skateboard
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skateboarding
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or
rollerblade
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rollerblading
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and making art or craft are not the
favorite
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favourite
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things to do. for
boys
. Just over half
percent
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per cent
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of daughters
making
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make
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art and craft in their leisure time, in the contrary there is only 40% of sons. At the same time, playing skateboard
dominated
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is dominated
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by man-child.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • engagement levels
  • leisure activities
  • downward trend
  • popularity
  • participation rates
  • comparisons
  • analyze
  • general trends
  • highlight
  • significance
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