The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows how the process of producing chocolate from
cocoa
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beans
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, there are 10 main stages in the process, beginning with growing
cocoa
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trees and ending with the production of liquid chocolate. In the first
place
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place,
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cocoa
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trees are grown in America, Arifica and Indonesia.
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the ripe red pods are harvested
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the white
cocoa
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beans
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are
removes
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removed
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.
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the
beans
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are fermented for several days before being spread out in the sun to dry. After that, the dried
beans
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are put into large sacks.
Following
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this
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, the sacks of
cocoa
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beans
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are transported to a factory by train or lorry. By
this
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stage, the
beans
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are roasted before being crushed
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their outer shell are removed.
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, the inner part
pressed
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is pressed
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to produce liquid chocolate.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cocoa, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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