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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The given graph compares the number of international
tourists
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 in 5 different countries from 1995 to 2010. Generally speaking, the USA had the highest number of international
tourists
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 among these countries, and the number of
tourists
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 who visited France during
this
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 period increased rapidly. So, France as a tourist destination become more popular over time.
Initially
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, in 1995, more than 70
million
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 international
tourists
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 travelled
the
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 USA
while
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 just above 30
million
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tourists
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 travelled to France. Brazil and Egypt had less than 10
million
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tourists
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this
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 year compared to
the
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apply
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just above 20
million
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tourists
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 in Malaysia. Over the period, the total
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tourists
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number of tourists
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visited
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who visited
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 these 5 countries increased with some slight fluctuations.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international tourist arrivals
  • insight
  • trend
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • statistic
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • surge
  • data point
  • comparative
  • quantitative analysis
  • economic factor
  • political stability
  • tourism sector
  • global event
  • destination popularity
  • benchmark
  • year-on-year change
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