The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The given graph compares the number of international
tourists
in 5 different countries from 1995 to 2010.
Generally speaking, the USA had the highest number of international tourists
among these countries, and the number of tourists
who visited France during this
period increased rapidly. So, France as a tourist destination become more popular over time.
Initially
, in 1995, more than 70 million
international tourists
travelled the
USA Change preposition
to the
while
just above 30 million
tourists
travelled to France. Brazil and Egypt had less than 10 million
tourists
this
year compared to the
just above 20 Correct article usage
apply
million
tourists
in Malaysia. Over the period, the total tourists
Correct quantifier usage
number of tourists
visited
these 5 countries increased with some slight fluctuations.Correct pronoun usage
who visited
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